Wednesday, August 10, 2005

First Draft Fun

I was revising the first draft of my conversion short story (hey, we have side-bet taker) and I came across this luverly faux pas:
I brush a hand at a drowsy bee near my head. It flies off, buzzes down to the beach.
Aaaah, the joys of pronouns with unclear referrants.


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